This one paragraph contains a business writing error. Find and correct it:
Last year’s sales reports and salary structures prove that profit-sharing plans incentivize employees to meet sales goals. Sales were 8% higher for those employees who received a bonus based on their profitability, instead of their longevity.
Explanation:
This contains a recently coined business-speak “verb,” which is an objectionable form of jargon.
Last year’s sales reports and salary structures prove that profit-sharing plans incentivize employees to meet sales goals. Sales were 8% higher for those employees who received a bonus based on their profitability, instead of their longevity.
Here is the corrected version:
Last year’s sales reports and salary structures prove that profit-sharing plans encourage employees to meet sales goals. Sales were 8% higher for those employees who received a bonus based on their profitability, instead of their longevity.
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